If you're an author, aspiring or published, chances are you've heard of "show vs. tell," but that doesn't necessarily mean you have a solid grasp on what it means. At times I struggle with the concept myself, as evidenced by the "Stop telling!" comments my editor makes on the early drafts of my novels.
I recently read a book that helped me understand why it's so important to show and not tell. Throughout the novel the author explicitly told me how the characters were feeling or what they were doing. As a result I found myself thinking, "Why is the author telling me this? Does he think I'm too dumb to realize that on my own?" Following are some specific examples, with some details changed to protect the author's identity:
See how unnecessary the italicized parts are? Good writing makes it clear that characters are astonished, or explaining something, or in disbelief, without having to tell the readers as much.
When we take away the telling and, in some cases, add in some showing, do you notice how much stronger those same sentences are?
The above examples let us readers use our brains to figure out what is going on, and that's a much more enjoyable experience than being told what is going on. Keep that in mind when you"re working on your next project!
-Maria
Maria Murnane is the best-selling author of the Waverly Bryson series, Cassidy Lane, Katwalk, and Wait for the Rain. She also provides consulting services to aspiring and published authors. Have questions? You can find her at www.mariamurnane.com.
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