What is the first sentence of your work-in-progress? Post it here, and get feedback from your fellow She Writers about whether your opening line leaves them wanting more. And don't forget to take some time to read other writers' first words, too.
Agreed! ...but beware of passive voice! Can you reword the sentence to eliminate the weak verb "was"? Something like "The first time a monster attacked me, xyz... Then maybe specify how the narrator is alone that gives the reader an immediate sense of place: ...sat in an abandoned bus station, or whatever she is doing at that moment :)
Agreed! It conjures a familiar feeling of being forgotten, ignored, not wanted that we all experience at some point. I definitely want to know more and I already feel extremely sympathetic to this character.
Thanks for the prompt feedback. A woman in my writing group, I really trust her-- told me my novel started there for her. So I chucked everything before it and started there. I'm delighted to hear it's working.
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