Opening Lines

What is the first sentence of your work-in-progress?  Post it here, and get feedback from your fellow She Writers about whether your opening line leaves them wanting more.  And don't forget to take some time to read other writers' first words, too.

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Permalink Reply by Kristen Taber on August 20, 2011 at 6:23pm
lol...well, we'll see, but thank you. I'm hoping to pub as soon as I can get my marketing in line :).
Permalink Reply by Marlene Dotterer on August 21, 2011 at 1:52pm
Wow! Is this going to keep me up at night?
Permalink Reply by Kristen Taber on August 25, 2011 at 7:22am
It's the hope :). The prologue and first three chapters of the first book in the series are on my website (http://www.kristentaber.com/category/aerenden) if you're curious.
Permalink Reply by Kristen Taber on August 26, 2011 at 11:22am
Thank you.
Permalink Reply by Ms. Reality Space on August 20, 2011 at 9:41pm
I am still seduced by the haunt of my darkest moods, the white-hot light of mania.
Permalink Reply by Kristen Taber on August 20, 2011 at 10:23pm
Nice!
Permalink Reply by Maria Granovsky on September 1, 2011 at 7:14am
I'm withCourtney.  I want to continue reading, but the use of the word "haunt" made me pause in the middle of the sentence and I had to read it twice to get past it.
Permalink Reply by Marlene Dotterer on August 21, 2011 at 1:50pm
The room rose and fell in balance-defying swells.
Permalink Reply by Michelle Zumbrunnen on August 21, 2011 at 8:33pm
Yeah, that line would definitely make me keep reading.  Nice.
Permalink Reply by Vera Hendon on August 22, 2011 at 12:54pm
 We had already decided tonight was the night. Julie and Kenny have their own reasons for leaving the small yuppie town behind them. As far I'm concerned they don't have a clue and I'm not about to share my misery with anyone.
Permalink Reply by Stacy Mantle on August 23, 2011 at 10:38am
I like this a lot! It sets up conflict right away and makes me want to read more. :)
Permalink Reply by Stacy Mantle on August 23, 2011 at 10:22am

It was 5:48 pm on a Wednesday when Trey Haskin had his throat torn out.

The death was only significant because it was the fourth one in as many days. My department only got the call because of the way in which the guy was killed. I only cared because now I had to stand in the shadows of a rapidly darkening alley waiting on a creature that may or may not ever show up.

This is my life: a twisted version of the Butterfly Effect.

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That's the first few lines of my novel, "Shepherd's Moon."

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