Love this--sassy tones always grab me. I would definitely read more.
thank you! :)
My favorite first line I ever wrote is:
"Sometimes I just want to watch."
The first line of my current novel-in-progress is:
"I walked through the front doors thinking it didn’t look any different from all the other hospitals I’d been to in the past few years."
I really like that favorite first line of yours. Immediately captures the attention, and makes the reader want to know what the narrator wants to watch. Or at least nosy readers, like me. :)
This is a fun thread idea! I've seen quite a few openings here that would definitely keep me reading!
Here are my first few, from the literary/romantic-comedy I'm publishing this spring, Exactly Where They'd Fall.
"Jodie hated adorable things, like happy couples, children, or puppies. Jodie hated nice things, like sunshine, candy, or hugs. But Jodie didn’t hate Drew, somehow, with that smile, so toothy and nice, with those kind, dark eyes, rich as coffee. He was as put together as a Ken doll, a poster boy for Banana Republic. He was charming and chivalrous, positively adorable. Sweet even. She didn’t even ask him to help and here he was in her apartment with his laptop, going though his Facebook friends, all nine-hundred-forty-three of them trying to find her a new roommate."
@Laura...I'd fall for eyes rich as coffee, too. I love the opening paragraph. I already picture Jodie as someone who dresses and black and consciously tries not to smile...at anything. Interesting title, too. How'd you come up with it?
Regina, thanks! Yup, you pretty much nailed it with Jodie, lol! I'm glad to hear she's coming across clearly then.
The title comes from a line of text in one of the middle chapters. :)
Oh cool. I think I find my titles (to books and stories) that way.
Do you remember the animated show "Daria" that was on MTV or one of those channels? That's what I pictured. I LOVED Daria, by the way. Dry wit, sharp tongue. I'm picturing Jodie kind of like that. Seems to be covered in dark mood all the time, but you can't help but like her. And you don't quite know why.
Ha, yes! Daria was my hero! <3
She reeked of stale grease, cigarettes, and caked on sweat from a weeks worth of plowing in the hot sun with little opportunity for bathing.
Hmmm. Very interesting. Picturing a strong Ethel Barrymore-type character, Dust Bowl era, maybe. If it weren't for the plow, I would have seen a Miss Kitty (from Gunsmoke) character. Sassy, beautiful, but probably could use a break from the saloon for "girl time" clean up.
My 327th attempt on the same WIP:
Each day, Linny Eagle woke up with a silent scream: Get me out of here!