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Permalink Reply by Patricia IluvMr Edwards on June 5, 2012 at 6:27am

It's fine lol. Honestly it's my first book so I don't really put too much emphasis on it. I love the characters in it and I love how they react to things that happen. A lot of it is based off of real things that happened because each person in the story represents a person in my life. *Author's Note

I know I'm not the only one who sucks at a synopsis lol. I hate that I can't write one well. I hate it with all of Soniya's fury (and trust me that is a lot of fury) but if I want to get better at it then I will keep working on it. This site has actually been very helpful to me and I have only been a part of it for 2 days. I know that if I don't figure it out on my own, someone here will give me the advice I need to find it. Who knows: at the rate we are going it may just be you LOL

Permalink Reply by Syeda Tasmia Tahia on June 4, 2012 at 7:45am

Awesome!! I am 17 and this seems interesting...Is it only one story or is it part of a series...I would love to read it!

Permalink Reply by Patricia IluvMr Edwards on June 5, 2012 at 6:32am

Well honestly <.< ....... >.> 

I haven't completely decided yet. It was going to be just the one story but I started a blog about it last week. (Which reminds me that I should probably update that). It's a series of short stories of things that happen after the end of the book. Writing those stories made me love my characters all over again. So much so that I may write another. But that information is top secret (whether I do or not)

If you want to read the book you can buy it on Amazon.com or Lulu.com

My blog only has two stories so far and they don't give you nearly as much information as you will need to know who the people are or what they can do or even what theyve been through. But if you want you can check it out:

sonindai.blogspot.com

Be sure to leave a comment or follow. Comments are great so I can know what people think and followers obviously mean that people like my story enough to want to keep up with it lol. Check it out and let me know what you think.

Permalink Reply by Marilyn Bostick on June 4, 2012 at 9:08am

Patricia, I would love to support you! You're book sounds fantastic. I look forward to reading it. :)

Permalink Reply by Patricia IluvMr Edwards on June 5, 2012 at 6:33am

Thank you. I was just telling the last person about my blog continuing after the book. It isn't much yet but if you want you can check it out:

Sonindai.blogspot.com

Permalink Reply by Marilyn Bostick on June 4, 2012 at 9:10am

It is fun to see young writers in here!

Permalink Reply by Syeda Tasmia Tahia on June 4, 2012 at 11:18am

I am working on this young adult fiction/bildungsromane : 'Silent Voices'.  It is the story of 4 young-adults (17 year olds), who must conquer their personal demons to successfully survive relationships. Each character starts off appearing to be living happy and prosperous lives, though, they each have a problems, which they are not willing to face up to. But when they come into each other's lives, they help them heal from their internal wounds. But things turn into a fiasco, as all the three girls fall deeply in love with the girl, and each of them need her to forget their pasts, while she herself needs someone to teach her to live life, rather than just let life rule her. The climax of the story would be her choosing one of the 3, but would she be able to do so without ruining 2 of her best friends? This why the tagline is: 

Because in a world where wants precede needs, only two can survive happily...

here's the proplong and the first 3 chapters:

P:http://www.shewrites.com/profiles/blogs/silent-voices-the-prolong

1.http://www.shewrites.com/profiles/blogs/silent-voices-the-bright-ey...

2.http://www.shewrites.com/profiles/blogs/silent-voices-the-prince-of...

3.http://www.shewrites.com/profiles/blogs/silent-voices-the-reckless-...

 

I would love to hear your comments on the plot, the characters, the title etc, and how they compare to each other, and about  their initial likeability. Also, do comment on any improvements possible. Thanks!

Permalink Reply by Sophie Schiller on June 4, 2012 at 11:30am

Syeda,
Given the awful news of late, you might want to remove the phrase "cannibalistic barbarian" from your MS.

Also, populating your story with 4 main characters might prove complicated and frustrating for a lot of readers. A novel is not a soap opera. Can you take just one of them and make her your protagonist and show her weaving her way through this story, on her journey of maturity, making these new friends, learning about life through them and discarding the ones who prove destructive or selfish. While the males may vie over the female, she still has to conquer her own demons to select the most appropriate male, the one who won't make her compromise her own values.
Keep going. Good luck!
Rachel

Permalink Reply by Patricia IluvMr Edwards on June 6, 2012 at 6:05am

Well reading what she has it would seem that they would all end up learning something from the whole thing. I don't think it makes her story a soap opera for having 4 main characters. There are books like that and what they seem to do is help the reader find a favorite character of their own instead of forcing them to choose based off of what happens through the MC's eyes.

Honestly I think it's a good way to challenge a writer as well. Having the ability to switch between characters is not an easy feat. I know because I am doing it and I have seen it done. Having a protagonist is something that can be done but isn't absolutely necessary. There isn't always going to be one in life so why should we shelter our readers as if that were the case?

Permalink Reply by Sophie Schiller on June 6, 2012 at 7:31am

Anothing term for that is:  "hedging one's bets".

Permalink Reply by Patricia IluvMr Edwards on June 6, 2012 at 2:05pm

But that's doesn't seem like what she would be doing if she changed her story from what it is to what you suggest. Your suggestion would take her entire idea and reshape it based on something you would do instead. Don't get me wrong. I am not trying to say that your advice is bad or wrong and I hope you arent taking it that way. I just think that playing it safe isn't always the best way to go.

 

And that isn't "hedging one's bets". It's withdrawing completely. When someone wants to go the distance for something then others should encourage them. Besides, this is not the first time this has been done. There are plenty of successful books that have several MC's

Permalink Reply by Sophie Schiller on June 6, 2012 at 4:08pm

I understand where you're coming from but I stand by my advice.  And mind you, that doesn't mean the POV always has to reflect the MC's perspective.

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