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Kara’s boyfriend, Phaethon, and her grandfather die in a plane crash, and Kara's only company now is a tribal drum in her head that beats to the tune of her fluctuating emotions. Her grief and loneliness push her to end it all. When Phaethon’s spirit comes back, seventeen-year-old Kara is happy but fearful. Well, her boyfriend’s a ghost. And to up the fear factor, a sinister spirit also arrives, looking exactly like her boyfriend.

Set in real town Lynn Haven, Florida, readers of this tale will witness a Native American girl torn from her new bubble of oblivion as her friend, Lane, rants about the appearance of Phantom Phaethon. Lane insists nothing good can come of the haunting. And he's right. The evil spirit, an echo, doesn't hide itself from residents of this bay-side town and violently targets men in Kara's life, almost killing Lane. The only way to make the echo go away is to release Phaethon back into the afterlife. She must bid her phantom lover goodbye or face the loss of others. Kara’s not sure if she can survive either choice.

WHITE STAR is a dark tale about young lovers facing the ultimate test when one tragically meets his end. Kara’s grief binds Phaethon to this world where he battles the pull of the afterlife. This Young Adult Supernatural Romance is 80,000 words. The story is comparable to DARK INSIDE by Jeyn Roberts with the constant fear of not knowing who your enemy is because he looks just like your friend. WHITE STAR is stylistically reminiscent of BETWEEN SHADES OF GRAY by Ruta Sepetys. Told from the perspective of Kara, an introspective lyrical dancer, readers will feel every emotion and even laugh a little on the way.