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Jane Flowers replied to the discussion 'Need your feedback!!!' in the group Your First Novel
"I posted some edits and new chapters. Please take a look!"
Jul 23, 2012
Jane Flowers replied to the discussion 'Need your feedback!!!' in the group Your First Novel
"Please... I posted everything to my blog."
Jul 23, 2012
Jerilyn Ring replied to the discussion 'Need your feedback!!!' in the group Your First Novel
"I would be happy to read your chapters. "
Jul 23, 2012
Elizabeth Yon commented on the blog post 'Chapter 2'
"Jane, I, too, am working on my first novel.  Up to now, I've written poetry and short stories (my first book is a collection of short stories), so I am in the same space as you with trying to figure out how I write a novel.  Each…"
Jul 20, 2012
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Jul 19, 2012
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Jul 19, 2012
Jane Flowers commented on the blog post 'Chapter 2'
"About my grammar issues - please let me know if you see that I keep repeating the same grammar error over and over...."
Jul 19, 2012
Jane Flowers commented on the blog post 'Chapter 1'
"@LeTeisha Newton Oh, so it is obvious that English isn't my native language... Now I am upset :) No, not really... I am trying to learn and there is no way to improve without some criticism. Please tell me exactly what makes it sound different.…"
Jul 19, 2012
LeTeisha Newton commented on the blog post 'Chapter 1'
"@Elizabeth   I completely agree!"
Jul 19, 2012
LeTeisha Newton commented on the blog post 'Chapter 1'
"@Jane I am happy you were not upset by my look at your piece (there are some that get upset). However, I feel that it only helps not hinders. I was going to ask you if English was a second language just beacuse of some of your word usuage :)"
Jul 19, 2012
Jane Flowers commented on the blog post 'Chapter 2'
"Thank you very much, Elizabeth!!! Now before writing Chapter 3 I am going to re-write the previous ones according to your comments. These were "raw" chapters - I wrote what was coming into my mind, and, sure thing, this part now needs a…"
Jul 19, 2012
Elizabeth Yon commented on the blog post 'Chapter 2'
"Hi Jane, I was eager to read your 2nd chapter after sampling the first one.  First, Anna is an interesting character. Second, coming to the USA from Norway with a degree in Med Bio, and then accepting a teaching position in the deep South is a…"
Jul 19, 2012
Elizabeth Yon commented on the blog post 'Chapter 1'
"Hi Jane! You do have a few grammatical issues here, but they are easily addressed.  As LeTeisha points out, watch your tense - it changed several times.  Your description is quite good, and the protaganist, though nascent, interests…"
Jul 19, 2012
Jane Flowers added a discussion to the group Your First Novel
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Need your feedback!!!

My first attempt writing a novel. It's fiction and I have some great ideas about its plot. Please take a look and let me know what you think. At this point I worry about 1. grammar and easiness to read 2. story 3. styleI will post it chapter by chapter in my blogSee More
Jul 18, 2012
Jane Flowers commented on the blog post 'Chapter 1'
"LeTeisha - Thank you very much! Your comment means a lot to me and please criticize me as much as you wish:) I am always happy to get some feedback and yours is very constructive! Well... "a day" kind of things - English isn't my…"
Jul 18, 2012
LeTeisha Newton commented on the blog post 'Chapter 1'
"Ok...   I assume you posted this for not only feedback on the work but critique as well? If you did not, forgive me, however I enjoy helping my fellow writers :)   1) Be careful of some of your word placement. The "a day" and…"
Jul 18, 2012

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Chapters 3 & 4

Posted on July 19, 2012 at 6:32pm 0 Comments

Chapter 3

She woke up next day around 10am when it was almost time to leave the hotel. She had no place to go.  She was still sad, upset and tired and didn’t feel like talking to anyone or meeting someone new. No one in this city knew her name, or who she was, or what is she doing here. She got there by accident and had no plans at all.

Anna quickly washed her face and ran downstairs to inform the receptionist that she will be staying in her room for another day or two. She got…

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Some edits to Chapters 1 & 2

Posted on July 19, 2012 at 2:18pm 0 Comments

Chapter 1

She was calm, her mind was clear and she felt like she wasn’t even present there. She wasn’t scared or worried. She knew it was coming.  In fact, she lived through this many times before and even though it was terrifying from time to time, it always ended well. 

She was in her house –not a very solid structure made of thin wood and carton and rather old. Huge storm was coming their way and despite it happening during day it was getting darker and darker outside. It…

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Chapter 2

Posted on July 18, 2012 at 8:30pm 4 Comments

My name is Anna. I am 30 years old, lean and tall golden blonde. My hair is long any my eyes are bright green. I was born and grew up in Norway, so I am more used to colder weather. How did I end up in the Deep South? After graduating from the Medical School of the University of Bergen with a degree in Medical Biology I was offered a teaching job in Alabama. It sounded like an adventure, so, I decided to try. English was a challenge at first, as well as a very different culture. It took me a…

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Chapter 1

Posted on July 18, 2012 at 12:03pm 6 Comments

I was calm, my mind was clear and I felt like I wasn’t even present there. I wasn’t scared or worried. I knew it was coming.  In fact, I lived through this many times before and even though it was terrifying from time to time, it always ended well. 

I was in my house –not a very solid structure made of thin wood and carton and rather old. Huge storm was coming our way and despite it happening during a day it was getting darker and darker outside. It almost felt like a night, but since…

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