"You're not mixing up POV's. You're writing in omniscient POV which means you see all all the knowledge. Usually there is a single narrator who tells what's going on and gives the information on the characters. None of the…"
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Linnea Worley replied to the discussion 'POVs - Rule or no Rule?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
Linnea Worley replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"She's a demon. She's the demon queen so she does have super human powers. No one is watching her, though. Eventually someone is, but that takes place later one.
Should I post the whole prologue?
The thing about skilled editors is I…"
Deni Cary Phillips replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"Hi Linnea. I started to read the other comments, but stopped myself at one point. You're getting a lot of advice, so I'll try to be brief. 1) She is bloody, but not human? 2) The setting seems both ominous and carefree. I think you're…"
Lynne Favreau replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"Those are great explanations of your intent within the world you are building. One can only go by their own impressions based on their knowledge and experiences. With only those few sentences to work with taken completely out of context—well…"
Linnea Worley replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"Thanks!"
Vicki Batman replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"I like the second better. Orients the reader with the character and the setting."
Linnea Worley replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"First off, in Siam it is uncommon to have a chilling wind in the summer months, especially in a forest. That's where this takes place.
Second, I've lived near rushing rivers my entire life and yes, they can be murky and have a musky scent.…"
Lynne Favreau replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"A few things strike me as off. It's not uncommon to have a chill in the air in summer. A single woman meaning she's not married? otherwise a woman is single. It's seems deliberately long winded, rather than aptly so.
The second…"
Linnea Worley left a comment for Catrina Barton
"Please answer my email. I just want to know you read it, at least, and I don't want to be fighting anymore."
Linnea Worley replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"Thanks :) That's what I feared with the first one. I hate not being able to pull people into the story.
I'll ditch the "before her" then. Thanks!
Well, the blood isn't hers. It's that of a family members. Of course,…"
Heather Marsten replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"I like the second one - the first one doesn't pull me in to the story.
The second one starts the reader asking questions - why is she alone? Showing the wind's actions is good, and the reader wonders why the bloodied…"
Linnea Worley replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"Well, I did just write the second one in about two minutes :P The other one has been revised multiple times. I'll work on getting it cleaner, though I personally like the fluff. It sets the mood for the type of style I want for the prologue.…"
Regina Y. Swint replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"The imagery is cleaner and the text is just tighter. Except for a few glimmers of moonlight on the fish, you said the same thing in the first passage, but with less fluff. Of course, a lot of readers like fluff. I just tend to like less…"
Linnea Worley replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"Alright :) May I ask for what reason?
I don't have an editor. I'm self editing it. And I'm considering pushing back the date, but if I actually get my act together I can finish this before the end of August and get it up. My only set…"
Regina Y. Swint replied to the discussion 'Which opening do you like better?' in the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
"I like the first one better.
August is very close. What opening does your editor suggest? I would say not to rush it. Speaking from experience, I know how it feels to want to get a product out there, but if you take your time, you…"
Linnea Worley added a discussion to the group Novelists (Struggling or Not)
Which opening do you like better?
I've never been satisfied with the opening of my WIP novel I want to get published in August. This was the original:~~~The winds blew harshly, bringing about a chill to the evening uncommon in the summer months. A single woman stood there, eyes trained to the river rushing through the small clearing. She allowed her black hair to move as the wind did, despite the fact that she herself stayed still, and the ripped, bloodied garments rustled in time with the gusts. At first glance she seemed…See More
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- Who I am:
- I'm a young writing who you can call Linnea, Sune, Sarah, Thako, or Sun. I'll respond to pretty much anything, but those are the names I go by the most.
I'm mostly a fantasy writer and I love first person.
- Connect with me online! My site, blog, or Twitter handle are:
- http://mlworley.blogspot.com/
- Books I've written, anthologies I've contributed to, and any scripts or plays I've authored:
- I've written many books, including, The Fallen Nine, Secrets of the Nine, and Is there an Elephant in the room. None of which I've published yet.I'm currently working on the first book of a trilogy called The Lahibour Trilogy. The first book is titled, Childhood.
- My writing is:
- Fiction, Journalism, Blog Posts, Screenwriting
- Services I offer to other writers:
- I offer currently free advice on character and story development, though starting in the summer I'm going to actually open a site where I get paid for that. Time is money, after all.
- I'm part of these writers' groups or salons:
- Critique Circle
- I found out about She Writes from:
- A good friend of mine who is also on this site
Comment Wall (5 comments)
- At 9:10am on June 24, 2012,
Meg Waite Clayton said… Linnea, Belated welcome to the novelist group; we're delighted to have you join us! If you haven’t done so already, you might introduce yourself by telling us what you’re working on in the “Show Me Your Novel and I’ll Show You Mine” discussion. We do a live chat Wednesdays at 1 EST; instructions on how to participate are in the "Our Water Cooler" box near the top of the group page. Do join us! And we save the wall for discussion, but welcome links to helpful blog posts on the “Links to Helpful Blog Posts for Writers” discussion thread.
Meg Waite Clayton
Novelist Group Moderator
Bestselling Author of four novels, including The Wednesday Sisters, (a writing group novel), and the forthcoming The Wednesday Daughters (all Random House/Ballantine)
- At 5:20am on April 8, 2012,
Jill Starishevsky said…
Welcome to SheWrites. Feel free to reach out if you need anything.
Jill Starishevsky
Prosecutor, Child Abuse/Sex Crimes
Author, My Body Belongs to Me - A Child Sexual Abuse Prevention book
- At 3:37pm on April 6, 2012,
Catrina Barton said… You're welcome. :)
- At 3:27pm on April 6, 2012, Catrina Barton said…
Aha! There you are. XD Welcome aboard.
- At 8:12am on April 6, 2012,
Amber Medina West said… Hello,
Welcome to She Writes! We're excited to have you here.
You can check out the Getting Started section to help you find your way around, or a great way to jump in is to get involved with our Groups and Live Chats.
Feel free to let me know if you have any questions!All the best,
Amber Medina West
Volunteer Coordinator
Twitter: @amberwest
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AJ Wiliams commented on the group 'Novelists (Struggling or Not)'"Alison,
I would also like to know about a query critique group "
AJ Wiliams commented on the group 'Novelists (Struggling or Not)'"Congrats Meg that is great to hear"
Shannon Alexander commented on the group 'Your First Novel'"Alison - check out She Writes Query Critique v 2.0 group. I've gotten good feedback there in the past. Also, Agent Query Connect is a great source too (but be prepared to pay it forward there and offer others critiques in exchange for your own)."
Alison Kucich commented on the group 'Novelists (Struggling or Not)'"Meg, great news! Congratulations! Now, on to query letters... do any of you know of or have a "query critique" group? I'm on my fourth draft of this bad boy and have recently had it picked apart by a prominent agent…"
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