Ophelia's Rue
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Ms. Reality Space
January 2012
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Written by
Ms. Reality Space
January 2012

Ophelia’s Rue

 

I noted life in the eyes of others

perhaps a moment unsung for them

 

I found vibrant life so surprising

that I hid and wept

 

behind the gravestone of a child

crooked in the earth, unadorned

 

I drank rue

plunged into the brook

 

Naming the nameless

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  • Lesa Ann Weller

    Oh, yeah.  It really flows better now and I have a better understanding of what you were trying to get across.  I'm glad the suggestion helped.  It is a wonderful, touching and moving poem.  You have the words - you have a voice. 

  • Thanks Lesa, for the comments.  I love the idea of bringing it into the present... here it is:

    Ophelia’s Rue

     

    I note life in the eyes of others

    perhaps a moment unsung for them

     

    I find vibrant life so surprising

    that I hide and weep

     

    behind the gravestone of a child

    crooked in the earth, unadorned

     

    I drink rue

    plunge into the brook

     

    Naming the nameless

  • Lesa Ann Weller

    I really like this poem. "Poignant" was a world I was also going to use in my comment.  The poem's imagery is strong.  I would only suggest rewriting in the present to allow more movement and action.  Nice job.

  • Deborah Batterman

    Words deftly used -- i.e., 'rue' -- simply echo with poignancy.